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I got rid of my first post because it felt a little harsh, but writers, develop a thick skin or don't write at all.
when a writer pulls a risky move in their work, they will get some praise, and they will get some backlash, and they will get those things for a variety of reasons. writers who get backlash for a risky move shouldn't label the critics into one category, because the criticism is for different reasons. i've learned this as a writer over the years. when i first started, i used to label people who disliked some of the content in my work as christian haters, but i learned that that wasn't always the case, so i took the backlash and the praise alike in stride. i've pulled some moves that pushed the envelope in my work, and i accept that not everyone will like it and it's for different reasons. sometimes, in fact most of the time, criticism is good for a writer. it helps a writer grow and learn to improve their stories and make the stories better as they go. it's the same for artists, if we didn't get critiques for our art, we would still be drawing stick men. i have a rough draft of the end for the first space dogs book for you, take note that this is not the end of the story, but the end of the first act. critique away, i enjoy critics.
Samuel found Kali sitting quietly on the steps of the great pavilion overlooking Madison Square. She slumped over as if she was danced out from the New Yorker's Summer Party. Her vermillion dress glowed like fire in the lowlight. Samuel slouched down next to the radiant collie, trying to get a reaction out of her.
"You look like you came from a government meeting," Kali rasped in her sassy tone, apparently teasing him about his formal attire.
"Well you look like you came from a party gone wild," Samuel remarked back about her dress and hair. Samuel couldn't help but be amused by this woman.
"Well, it's getting dark, I've always wanted to walk around this city at this time, but father never let me go out after sunset," Kali said in a somber voice.
"No one is stopping us, let's go, i'll take you anywhere," Samuel suggested to her.
"I've never been to central park, it looks so lush in the pictures," Kali stated.
"Then central park at sunset it is, " Samuel agreed.
The two made their way to the golden green park as it shimmered in the radiant light. Kali stopped to look at Samuel square in the face, and Samuel found himself staring into Kali's golden eyes. Their hands grasped each other in a tight seal, as they both walked off into a golden New York sunset, ready for their next big adventure.
this is the end of the first act, and one of very few romance sequences in the story. the finale will not feature an ending like this at all because i hate romance finale's. Kali and Samuel are a couple, and this end seals that. Please make suggestions so i can make the first act end the best it can be.
also, disney park attendees, go there in the winter, not the summer, especially avoid june-july, heat, crowds, crying children, politics, you get the idea, if you really must go in summertime, all i can say is, i warned you. and i am thinking about doing a gag in my story about stupid hotel discounts, because some of the discounts at hotels are for the most random reasons. i think it would be funny to have sam and qin(his best buddy) walk into a hotel and get random discounts for stupid reasons.
when a writer pulls a risky move in their work, they will get some praise, and they will get some backlash, and they will get those things for a variety of reasons. writers who get backlash for a risky move shouldn't label the critics into one category, because the criticism is for different reasons. i've learned this as a writer over the years. when i first started, i used to label people who disliked some of the content in my work as christian haters, but i learned that that wasn't always the case, so i took the backlash and the praise alike in stride. i've pulled some moves that pushed the envelope in my work, and i accept that not everyone will like it and it's for different reasons. sometimes, in fact most of the time, criticism is good for a writer. it helps a writer grow and learn to improve their stories and make the stories better as they go. it's the same for artists, if we didn't get critiques for our art, we would still be drawing stick men. i have a rough draft of the end for the first space dogs book for you, take note that this is not the end of the story, but the end of the first act. critique away, i enjoy critics.
Samuel found Kali sitting quietly on the steps of the great pavilion overlooking Madison Square. She slumped over as if she was danced out from the New Yorker's Summer Party. Her vermillion dress glowed like fire in the lowlight. Samuel slouched down next to the radiant collie, trying to get a reaction out of her.
"You look like you came from a government meeting," Kali rasped in her sassy tone, apparently teasing him about his formal attire.
"Well you look like you came from a party gone wild," Samuel remarked back about her dress and hair. Samuel couldn't help but be amused by this woman.
"Well, it's getting dark, I've always wanted to walk around this city at this time, but father never let me go out after sunset," Kali said in a somber voice.
"No one is stopping us, let's go, i'll take you anywhere," Samuel suggested to her.
"I've never been to central park, it looks so lush in the pictures," Kali stated.
"Then central park at sunset it is, " Samuel agreed.
The two made their way to the golden green park as it shimmered in the radiant light. Kali stopped to look at Samuel square in the face, and Samuel found himself staring into Kali's golden eyes. Their hands grasped each other in a tight seal, as they both walked off into a golden New York sunset, ready for their next big adventure.
this is the end of the first act, and one of very few romance sequences in the story. the finale will not feature an ending like this at all because i hate romance finale's. Kali and Samuel are a couple, and this end seals that. Please make suggestions so i can make the first act end the best it can be.
also, disney park attendees, go there in the winter, not the summer, especially avoid june-july, heat, crowds, crying children, politics, you get the idea, if you really must go in summertime, all i can say is, i warned you. and i am thinking about doing a gag in my story about stupid hotel discounts, because some of the discounts at hotels are for the most random reasons. i think it would be funny to have sam and qin(his best buddy) walk into a hotel and get random discounts for stupid reasons.
Why I've Been Quiet
I joined this website when I was still in high school, and that was over a decade ago. I'm almost 30 now and as you all have noticed, I'm not as active on deviant art. One of the biggest reasons is just, I'm growing up. The format style is also a huge reason, eclipse isn't user friendly and I don't want to put all the time and effort into dealing with it, I grew up on HTML and Flashplayer. Then there's the issue with AI, I am strictly against the usage of AI and am a firm believer in keeping jobs and art human. DA has played a hand in the AI problem and I just can't condone that. I don't come here much because at this point, my values don't align with the website and on top of that, I'm older and I have to adult. Yes I'll still pop in every so often but not like I used to, not until I see change. If you do want to see more of me you can follow my other socials. I promise I'll still post once in a while, but I am more active on other websites at the moment. So before I take off, I will
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